Remember how I'm only sort of from ? I've lived there since I was two, but I was born in a place called, which is basically like a different version of, but in an alternate reality? And if you're reading this, you need to know about alternate realities. What happened to the red sky and the dying world? Well, let me tell you. And I just realized that I got totally off track again. But unless you're one of the six people who follows me on Snapgram, that probably doesn't mean anything to you. Yes, that Emma, from Emma's Instructions. (See, that's better already.) My name is Emma, by the way. Smoke in the air, a red sky, huddling alone in the ruins of a dying world. This is the sort of thing you fix." So we will find a time for that, eventually.ġ) Start with something exciting, to get the reader's attention.Ģ) Don't start with a blog post. But I had known that the magic was broken when I gave it to Dan, and I'm like, "Will you fix this?" And then Dan came back and said, "This isn't the sort of thing I fix. So the kind of just slightly off sense of the characterization ended up really working. And it turns out just nudging it a little more self-effacing funny made the whole thing worked. It was trying a little too hard to both be dynamic and funny. The voice was a little off, in the first one. And Dan just picked right up on that, and it was instant. What I love about it, though (and if you go and find his original thing, then obviously you'll be able to compare and contrast them and do your whole English essay on it), reading that, I can't really tell what is me and what is Brandon, because I think we managed to combine our two styles pretty well. Which will be a project of mine coming up eventually. Now, I've gotta figure out how to make the structure actually work. The character was broken in the original draft, and Dan fixed that. The magic system is part of that, but it's really the structure, because the climax doesn't work anymore.
So now, Dan's pitched it back to me to fix the structure, is what we need. But the problem is: we go off the rails real fast in books, the same way we go off the rails in panels.
You can actually go listen to my version of that chapter read at some point in the past, and you will find it's actually much worse. It's interesting when you add us together, oftentimes things just get weirder. We will find a time to eventually release this book.
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